Rich with potential.
I like it, but I expected more, that's my honest opinion. There's tons of potential hidden within this simple loop, all you need to do is tap into it.
I'll outline a pro and balance each with a con, and try not to write too much of a textwall :P
Firstly, excellent choice of music. James Horner is one of the best composers of strong evocative music, especially that of the movie Braveheart, which was a fantastic masterpiece filled with emotion. This particular piece is called "For The Love Of A Princess" for those who want to know, featuring the prominent movie theme at the beginning, immediately recognisable.
However, there is one danger to using effective music, and that is when your animation doesn't meet its standard. It creates an unconscious tension within the viewer because what their eyes see don't match what their ears hear. Your animation unfortunately to me, didn't have that balance. However, that only means you have so much more to excel in. Take that music as a criteria for which your animation should meet!
That's not to say you're nowhere near, because I like your graphical art. Animators are strong in their own different areas, and I think you've developed your graphical aspect quite well. The blends, shading and shadows all merge into that serene atmosphere you've created. I reckon there's a slight disproportion with the elf's body, the thighs area against the upper body, or it could just be me.
The animation is what I believe needs the most work. When I say there's potential, I mean there's lack of movement. The eye is capable of capturing even the tiniest of motions, and as animators it's our job to suffice the eye with as much candy in as short a space of time as possible, but not so overwhelming it becomes unrealistic, only enough to be lifelike.
I'm envisioning sporadic twitching of the grass, leaves rustling, swirling as a billow of wind flows through the forest, her locks of hair swaying in reply, chest slowly rising and falling in time with her breathing, eyelids blinking every so often, her eyes gazing at the tiny fish circling in the depths of the pond, the occasional mayfly flitting to a rest on a frond in the foreground, the delicate bounce of the leaf in response, before the insect launches itself into the air again. It's all about detail in animation that captures and captivates the viewer into its world. With a loop especially, you have to contain a lot more intricacy to compensate for the still camera perspective.
And what you've done with the perpetual swaying of the leg and the rippling of water is what indicates potential, you've opened the portal to a world of visual imagery, you just need to keep pulling on that string till it all comes out!
Anyway Rob, I'm sure you've improved since this submission, but I hope my words will also influence others! Keep up the good work mate.
You've put a lot of work into this Paul, and it's definitely paid off Garrett's rent. The cinematography was very well done, good use of different angles and focussing on the small things. I liked the receding cam view from the gem being locked up, and your alternation between multiple camera perspectives, something which takes skill in animation.
Really nice intro. I love it when animators intertextualise. Nice and simple plot, good build up, complication wasn't overly original but altogether tightly packaged.
Your background art was pretty damn decent. I noticed some cut corners like the pillars looking very two dimensional even though they were arranged three dimensionally, and flat doors, but hey barely anyone notices. Nice fyre ;D
You've really paid attention to the detail of light and colour, showing it on the stick figures themselves, the shadow of Garrett as he's climbing up the rope, changing the environment lighting when he puts out the fire, showing the light from opening door onto the guy sleeping, it really stood out to me. Really emphasises the environment of the scene.
And your audio. Wow. I have to say, it's one of the best I've seen so far. The first time Garrett spoke, I thought it was part of the music, it sounded that seamless. Just curious, were all the voices recorded?
You've really utilised stereo, which brings the viewer into the movie, instead of the movie to the viewer. Combined with switching of perspectives, in the scene with the drunk guy, and having that distinct transition from downstairs with the guards, then back up to the thief, that was something I rarely find people attempt. Very nice choice of soundtrack too, and lack of it as well in the silent scenes.
Now I hate to be a critic, but there were some things I didn't like.
- The eyes. Yes, you've probably got it many a time by now, but I really hate huge, wide, unnatural looking eyes unless they've got huge pupils to compensate heh. From the front, the guy looks like a downer because he's got no nose and the eyes just bunch into his face. And I know it's a style, and very hard to deliver good yet unique looking sticks, but at least make the eyes a bit smaller I reckon.
- Tweening. Yes, it saves so much time, but try playing with the ease, and making it a bit less 'straight', if you don't want to fbf everything. Physics are very important when dealing with sticks, and they are a bitch to master, I'll grant that. When he's loading an arrow, at least fbf that because it's close up and tweening becomes pretty obvious. There were two points where proper physics were critical, when he jumps from one landing to the other side, under the circular window,
- Action. There was barely a fight scene :P But fight scenes are hard so I'll save my remarks. I was really looking forward to some epic archery massacre though. Then again, he's just a thief.
Anyway, yeah my score's really more of an 8.5, but that rounds to 9 ;D
Again, you've done an exemplary piece of work, and made not just Stickpage, but all stick animators proud.
Ps. Time for some trivia. His right eye is the green one right? A few inconsistencies, before he hides in the library, two brown eyes; then when he goes into the bedroom, as well as afterwards when he's running back past the pillars, his left eye is the green one; before he fires the explosive arrow, his right eye is brown again ;D Sorry I'm being a detail whore haha.
A round of applause! Wait.. how round?
Excellent use of the English vernacular, a unique and very well thought out comic approach to what smart alecs live their lives doing. I enjoyed it thoroughly, the facial expressions were priceless. Also loved the credits haha, though I have yet to watch Amazing Grace. Is it any good? :P
Good effort! Here's some things you should improve on...
- Fluidity: try to smooth out the animation, it's fullbody so you really have to concentrate on putting more frames into movements
- Graphic quality: a hard one to perfect but just comes with experience. Try putting some shading and shadows into your backgrounds and graphics.
- Consistency: Gotta keep the characters' shapes and sizes relative throughout the animation
- When you get to it, put some decent audio instead of text for the speech. Good choice of music though!
- Effects: Experiment with effects tests, they'll spice everything up. More realistic blood, explosions, dust clouds, smoke, sword sparks etc.
You've still got a long way to go, but every step counts. Keep it up mate!
That is a very well balanced review. I think it deserved a bit more than a 6 :P
Well done. Decent animation. Nice plot. Amusing ending. Short but sweet. Altogether a good short Indre!
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Not really, that was very entertaining. Interesting use of concept haha.
Again, good stuff Dave.
Jake's been screwing every living thing on Pandora. Just gave Avatar a whole new meaning :3
Oh yeah, and masturbating will make him go blind. Dayum.
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Excellent work guys. Nice effects, tremendous action, unbelievable animation. You gotta go for a second, it'll be magnificent. STXDFHTKSFTFW:D
To all of us out there...
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Just absolutely STUNNING.....luv the 3D effects & cinematography.....incredible....
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